Resume Writing Group Reviews

Hi John,

Thanks for your feedback. We actually use no algorithms to write resumes (other than for the purpose of analyzing our work to make sure each document is ATS-friendly with respect to each client's career objectives).

It's important to understand that certain industries respond best to resumes that do not have excess fluff and this was the case in yours as well.

If you see room to improve, we're more than happy to discuss a revision.--Let us know !

-Andrew G

Dear James,

We're surprised to see you write this and have no idea what could've motivated such a response! I've just reviewed the resume we wrote for you and there's not a *single* item copy/pasted from your original. Here's a random excerpt of the document you originally submitted followed by our version (unformatted):
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YOURS:
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-Lead, supervise, and manage the operations of the Battalion Intelligence section during garrison operations, field training evolutions, and contingency operations. -Serve as the principal staff advisor to the Commanding Officer in matters pertaining to weather, enemy, and terrain as they relate to the warfighting functions. -Execute command intelligence functions through the effective employment of organic Battalion assets and the effective exploitation of tactical, operational, and strategic resources external to the Battalion. -Direct, manage, and supervise the production of analytical intelligence products in support of the Battalion Commander's intelligence requirements to include: bi-weekly intelligence updates; PACOM specific threat studies; intelligence PMEs; Intelligence Preparation of Battlespace (IPB) products; and force protection products. -Direct, manage, and supervise the implementation and the day to day operations of the Commander's information and personnel security program as the Assistant Security Manager. Billet Accomplishments -Led the Battalion's Intelligence Section in preparation for and during execution of Artillery Relocation Training Program 18-3 in Camp Fuji; constructed a Road to War brief in preparation for ARTP 18-3; acted as the red cell providing the Command with a realistic enemy situational template and scheme of maneuver and properly advised the Battalion Commander and Operations Officer on defeating the enemy force. -Held the billet of senior watch officer during the execution of a Battalion level, Artillery field operation, providing and maintaining overall situational awareness of the entire battlespace, conducting briefs and managing the staff functions within the Command Operations Center. -Managed the security clearances of 600 Battalion personnel utilizing the Joint Personnel Adjudication System; initiated, reviewed and facilitated 10 Secret and Top Secret security investigations for the Battalion and Unit Deployment Program Batteries. -Acted as the overall Range Safety Officer for a Battalion level field operation, managing and ensuring the safety of 4 different locations for over 400 personnel. -Led Battalion's Intelligence Section during Artillery operations during the Artillery Relocation Training Program 18-1 in Camp Fuji; provided the Command with a realistic enemy situational template and scheme of maneuver and properly advised the Battalion Commander and Operations Officer on defeating the enemy force. -Built and provided a Road to war brief in preparation for ARTP 18-1, established the narrative of the operation and provided essential information regarding weather, enemy, and terrain to all 355 personnel that participated in the exercise. -Led eight tactical convoys of 14 vehicles and 45 Marines, ensuring proper command and control and tactical employment of the convoys. -Served as Plane Commander and ensured the arrival of 204 personnel and equipment to Camp Fuji for ARTP 18-1. -Conducted two intelligence briefs to the Battalion Commander and primary staff members in regards to the PACOM AOR and friendly Signature Analysis. -Authored the S2 portion of the Battalions Combat Standard Operating Procedures. -Lead, supervise, and manage the operations of the Battalion Intelligence section during garrison operations, field training evolutions, and contingency operations.-Serve as the principal staff advisor to the Commanding Officer in matters pertaining to weather, enemy, and terrain as they relate to the warfighting functions.-Execute command intelligence functions through the effective employment of organic Battalion assets and the effective exploitation of tactical, operational, and strategic resources external to the Battalion.-Direct, manage, and supervise the production of analytical intelligence products in support of the Battalion Commander's intelligence requirements to include: bi-weekly intelligence updates; PACOM specific threat studies; intelligence PMEs; Intelligence Preparation of Battlespace (IPB) products; and force protection products.-Direct, manage, and supervise the implementation and the day to day operations of the Commander's information and personnel security program as the Assistant Security Manager.Billet Accomplishments-Led the Battalion's Intelligence Section in preparation for and during execution of Artillery Relocation Training Program 18-3 in Camp Fuji; constructed a Road to War brief in preparation for ARTP 18-3; acted as the red cell providing the Command with a realistic enemy situational template and scheme of maneuver and properly advised the Battalion Commander and Operations Officer on defeating the enemy force.-Held the billet of senior watch officer during the execution of a Battalion level, Artillery field operation, providing and maintaining overall situational awareness of the entire battlespace, conducting briefs and managing the staff functions within the Command Operations Center.-Managed the security clearances of 600 Battalion personnel utilizing the Joint Personnel Adjudication System; initiated, reviewed and facilitated 10 Secret and Top Secret security investigations for the Battalion and Unit Deployment Program Batteries.-Acted as the overall Range Safety Officer for a Battalion level field operation, managing and ensuring the safety of 4 different locations for over 400 personnel.-Led Battalion's Intelligence Section during Artillery operations during the Artillery Relocation Training Program 18-1 in Camp Fuji; provided the Command with a realistic enemy situational template and scheme of maneuver and properly advised the Battalion Commander and Operations Officer on defeating the enemy force.-Built and provided a Road to war brief in preparation for ARTP 18-1, established the narrative of the operation and provided essential information regarding weather, enemy, and terrain to all 355 personnel that participated in the exercise.-Led eight tactical convoys of 14 vehicles and 45 Marines, ensuring proper command and control and tactical employment of the convoys.-Served as Plane Commander and ensured the arrival of 204 personnel and equipment to Camp Fuji for ARTP 18-1.-Conducted two intelligence briefs to the Battalion Commander and primary staff members in regards to the PACOM AOR and friendly Signature Analysis.-Authored the S2 portion of the Battalions Combat Standard Operating Procedures.
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Battalion Intelligence Officer Hold comprehensive Battalion operations management responsibilities for garrison operations, field training, and contingencies, provide warfighting advisement to Commanding Officer concerning weather, enemy, and area terrain, and effectively utilize Battalion assets including exploitation of tactical/operational/strategic resources. Steer production of analytical intelligence including bi-weekly intelligence updates, PACOM-specific threat studies, intelligence PMEs, IPB, and force protection products, and serve as Assistant Security Manager with responsibilities for leading implementation of daily operation of Commander information/personnel security program.

Directed Intelligence Section in Artillery Relocation Training Program 18-3 in Camp Fuji, developed a Road to War brief in preparation for ARTP 18-3 and provided essential information on weather/enemy/terrain for 355 exercise participants, was red cell providing realistic enemy situational template, and advised Commander and Operations Officer on defeating enemy force.

Served as senior watch officer during Battalion-level artillery field operation, maintained situational awareness of entire battlespace, conducted briefs, and managed staff functions at Command Operations Center. Utilized Joint Personnel Adjudication System to manage security clearances of 600 personnel, directed ten Secret/Top Secret security investigations for Battalion and Unit Deployment Program Batteries, and served as Range Safety Officer for field operations, assuring safety of 400+ personnel at four separate locations.

Led eight tactical convoys comprised of 14 vehicles/45 Marines ensuring proper command and control, was Plane Commander and oversaw arrival of 204 personnel/equipment to Camp Fuji for ARTP 18-1, and delivered two intelligence briefs to Commander/primary staff members regarding PACOM AOR and friendly Signature Analysis.

Authored S2 portion of Battalion Combat Standard Operating Procedures, provided meteorological intelligence during weekly Battalion Operational Planning Team meetings, and delivered Enemy Course of Action for inclusion in training activities and Meteorological Intelligence for the Artillery Relocation Training Program 18.1.

Prepared four Security Manager reports providing situational awareness on Battalion personnel security clearances, used Joint Personnel Adjudication System to submit three incident reports for Continuous Evaluation Program, and initiated four Top Secret Security Investigations utilizing Electronic Questionnaire for Investigations Processing.

As Non-Combatant Evacuation Officer developed evacuation plans for 60+ families. Oversaw work performance of three Marines.

Battalion Intelligence OfficerHold comprehensive Battalion operations management responsibilities for garrison operations, field training, and contingencies, provide warfighting advisement to Commanding Officer concerning weather, enemy, and area terrain, and effectively utilize Battalion assets including exploitation of tactical/operational/strategic resources. Steer production of analytical intelligence including bi-weekly intelligence updates, PACOM-specific threat studies, intelligence PMEs, IPB, and force protection products, and serve as Assistant Security Manager with responsibilities for leading implementation of daily operation of Commander information/personnel security program.

Directed Intelligence Section in Artillery Relocation Training Program 18-3 in Camp Fuji, developed a Road to War brief in preparation for ARTP 18-3 and provided essential information on weather/enemy/terrain for 355 exercise participants, was red cell providing realistic enemy situational template, and advised Commander and Operations Officer on defeating enemy force.

Served as senior watch officer during Battalion-level artillery field operation, maintained situational awareness of entire battlespace, conducted briefs, and managed staff functions at Command Operations Center.

Utilized Joint Personnel Adjudication System to manage security clearances of 600 personnel, directed ten Secret/Top Secret security investigations for Battalion and Unit Deployment Program Batteries, and served as Range Safety Officer for field operations, assuring safety of 400+ personnel at four separate locations.

Led eight tactical convoys comprised of 14 vehicles/45 Marines ensuring proper command and control, was Plane Commander and oversaw arrival of 204 personnel/equipment to Camp Fuji for ARTP 18-1, and delivered two intelligence briefs to Commander/primary staff members regarding PACOM AOR and friendly Signature Analysis.

Authored S2 portion of Battalion Combat Standard Operating Procedures, provided meteorological intelligence during weekly Battalion Operational Planning Team meetings, and delivered Enemy Course of Action for inclusion in training activities and Meteorological Intelligence for the Artillery Relocation Training Program 18.1.

Prepared four Security Manager reports providing situational awareness on Battalion personnel security clearances, used Joint Personnel Adjudication System to submit three incident reports for Continuous Evaluation Program, and initiated four Top Secret Security Investigations utilizing Electronic Questionnaire for Investigations Processing.

As Non-Combatant Evacuation Officer developed evacuation plans for 60+ families.

Oversaw work performance of three Marines.

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We'll give you a call to discuss what might've happened or gone wrong so that we can come to a quick resolution & revision that'll make you THRILLED with your new resume.

Standing by..

-Andrew G.

Hi John,

Thanks so much for your feedback. We did send your resume as both a WORD and a PDF file to two email addresses. As explained, we cannot directly go into your computer and put it on there but you can right click the file in the email to save it to your computer anywhere you like! Alternatively, we're happy to email, fax, or snail mail it to you-- Just let us know !

-Andrew G.